by Darkest Sun Oct 10, 2010 9:06 pm
TheFraggable74 wrote: Darkest wrote:Weird...for some reason I haven't been getting emails on this sites updates. Sorry I've been inactive. Anyway I finally got around to writing a Phinbellaish (it gets more than way during the 2nd half) fanfiction. I posted it on Fanfiction.net and DeviantART awhile ago. It's...eh, I'm not sure. I don't think it's all that great but everyone who has reviewed, loved it. Then again, fanfiction.net users tend to be overlynice about reviews. Maybe someone here can bring me down a peg.
I update daily but I don't intend for it to be that long:
http://www.fanfiction.net/s/6372599/1/Next_Years_SummerOr you can look me up on DeviantART.
Holy crap, you wrote that?! I've been reading that story from the start, and I must say it's pretty damn good. It's probably one of the greatest I've seen on the section (aside from Roy's) in months. As you've said, it's ending soon, which saddens me...Still, I hope you write more stories like this one, because you're easily one of the few good writers on that entire section. I'd get around to reviewing the story, but my reviews can be quite lengthy and take a bit of time to write, and I haven't quite had the time to analyze all of the chapters as I usually do for reviews. Still, good job with what you've written. Loads better than about 97% of the stuff on that site.
If I have to say anything negative about it, it'll be in the review once I've reread it. Right now, all I can easily remember you doing badly with was part of the romance scene: Yes, referencing episodes is good, but it kind of dragged on. You basically referenced 20 or so episodes in that scene...and you didn't even come up with anything of your own. It'd have been pretty nice if you had come up with some other things/backstory elements we haven't seen yet...
Not only that, but you did the classic Phinbella cop-out moment and had them talk about the Paris scene in SBTY, and to a less pissing-me-off extent, The Beak. Honestly, those can be seen as important, but it would've been nice if you had strayed away from what probably every unoriginal Phinbella writer has been saying ever since these scenes came up.
I can't quite remember too many grammatical mistakes, but I'll reread it to check for them later on. I'd like to say I have more constructive things to say to you, but the bad thing about FF is that its stories have lowered my expectations so incredibly much that something like what you've written is basically a godsend to the archive. Expect a review sometime in the next week.
Well I finished it. Pretty poor in my opinion, but I kind of made that clear in the end. I'm surprised you haven't seen many grammar mistakes, I'm quite terrible at that to tell you the truth.
Truly, I'll be amazed if I still get good reviews after this, I really think I lost my touch.
Tsk, I had a feeling Chapter 5 was overdone. But it felt that way when I was writing several things in the story, when really it wasn't all that long...and my goody-goody sister said it wasn't that long either. *sigh* I should know better than to take everything she says seriously.
And yes, I am almost painfully unoriginal. But alas, I am writing a fanfiction instead of something of my own invention, so it is often to be expected.
But really, I'm afraid to say I really go out of my way to be unoriginal when I right things like this, in fact it was my fear of originality that was keeping me from writing the fanfiction for so long. The thing that bothered me was that Phineas and Ferb was a show that updated fairly well with new episodes and that there would be a time when something I wrote completely went against something canon.
You see, I try to make my fanfictions sound as canon and possible (not that I always succeed) while adding a few noncanonical things such as PhineasxIsabella so it feels like an episode.
I actually haven't read any Phineas and Ferb fanfictions for awhile, so I wouldn't know what you're talking about with the Paris scene and The Beak. Perhaps I'll go read some later and find out.
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